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Decent animation, however the video displayed small, I couldn't tell if it was a 4:3 video or a 16:9 video that had been converted to 4:3 and then again to a 16:9 or something. Exporting the video correctly would've made it easier to appreciate.

Other than that it's decently animated.

airman4 responds:

True , i'd kill to have a full HD rendering of this but at the time when i was creating it , we weren't thinking about hd videos (10 years ago )

i got what i could retrieve of it and worked with it and tried to not convert too much

I tried to upload a big file of quicktime (MOV) but newsgrounds refused it , so i had to convert it again and this time worked

One day i'll retry and try to upload a better quality file

Ah yes, finally Untown has premiered on Newgrounds. Not bad for a first one.

Like the other guy said your Pre-loader does seem to do something weird, it's flickering. That old laptop sure has had some super natural effects on your projects. Still when it's done it you can play it perfectly fine!

I'm still seeing some errors with the text that you didn't fix on your end. Such as the one at the very beginning which says 'presents'. A lot of bad habits here and there that I've previously brought to your attention. An Original EEFF production is also a bit off center for when you changed the font. Sound is a bit off but works owkai ish.

Oh god those phlorescent red tongues, they must be stopped in episode 2! hehe
Still suffering from a lot of unclean lines where you overlap them and cut poorly. It would also have been nice to see some shading, if you're going for a simple art style then it must be clean. That's why I go for a slightly more detailed art style so that you can't see the errors all that much (although I fix most of them anyways hehe). The lines are also very varied in size, not ideal. It doesn't follow the varied outline logics and seem to be composed out of pure necessity to have the line exist.

The humour is decent but some of the jokes were a bit forced or unnecessary and just ruined what would otherwise have been a good joke. "Eh, borderline Smosh joke." :C

Oh and 'Jordan Scavone' as Spokeniss steals the show, really great job on his part. He makes Spokeniss have so much character! Seriously can we just watch him cause mischief for the entirety of Untown? *****

Craig is also really good, 'CooperQuick' does a pretty good job at portraying his annoying yet likeable character.

The part where Craig is showing off all the locations, the music is a bit on the loud side.

When the character turn their heads their a little stiff and it would've been great to see some proper in-betweens. The sound is a bit out of sync here and there. Especially at the dinner scene.

Whoever did Nace's voice did a crap Job. Sorry m8!

Overall; Animation and drawings quite lazily done, I hope your new computer will give you some space to properly spend some time drawing everything to a better standard. That opening with the increased speed is something you should've abandoned long ago. Royalty free music is alright but remember to credit them or not based on the license, Unless it was a CC0 license. Overall presentation fairly owkai, for a first part I think this may be a little too vague, you really should've animated the pep-rally event going wrong at the end.

3 Stars. (Eh, not bad but not terrible either. Good job for a first one.)

PallidCrest responds:

Welp, you sure took up my whole feedback box with this XD, But I appreciate it! Maybe with my new computer, I'll spend more time making the character models more better drawn. Plus we don't know if the old models will work pretty well with the new computer. And yeah I was a bit lazy with the turning heads, I should've made better in betweens XD now that you see it.

But yeah, I'll take these recommendations. although it might take a lot more time to animate part 2 lol. Welp new computer, new start!

If someone touches in a way or place that makes you feel uncomfortable, that's no good.

kalabor106 responds:

I was really pushing for that saying, but some others didnt like it. Said it was over used.

Must've taken ages to do, looks really good! Well done.

Slackman responds:

The whole thing was made in under 10 weeks (the animation was probably done in closer to 8). I wish I had a bit more time to make it longer, but I'm still very happy with how it came out. I'm glad you enjoyed it!

Love it! Perhaps a bit rough around the edges (for example the background is just a wall) but for what it was, its pretty fantastic.

Perhaps It would be better you uploaded a regular video format for this instead of putting it into an swf.

JackSquatJB responds:

Thanks for the input! The reason the background is just a wall is partly because I'm trying to set up an overall story that these are monsters I bought online and they live on my desk. I haven't implemented that idea yet, but I wanted the recent videos to reflect that.

I also have this on YouTube, but I made this on here as a SWF so I could imbed links to my other pages at the end of this. I'm not quite sure how to do this on videos on NewGrounds!

Basically Killgore, except with a rabbit... FREAKUN COOL! Well done fellow!

thekillzar responds:

Hoho, Killgore is much more bad ass than Fluffy. I loved that animation, it was superb. But thanks for the compliment! And thank you for the review!

Then Killgore comes out and murders him! HAHA

HugoVRB responds:

MUAHAHA

SO many meaningful animations this week, its fantastic!

SingingmuteStuff responds:

Thanks :)

That poor Mr Saturn looking guy, Nice animation :)

tommykong95 responds:

Thanks, I saw your Mr.Saturn animation lol

Could you have made the resolution any bigger? Had to zoom out to 25 just to fit it on my screen. Even then newgrounds doesn't like the size.

JoshBlue responds:

Excuse me I was just testing it out, I ajusted the ratio and it should now be ok!

Check out my website! :)

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